October Girl

Timea, this work is amazing, I'm very proud of you. I think you should submite this to a poetry contest. This piece is amazing. I'm truly in love with it ...

hello love, this is a very good poem you got going I could feel the emotion behind it. Truth be told my friend is going through the exat same thing. ...

Hello, Twilight Girl. (Love the name by the way) I'm October Girl but you can just call me Max or Chelsea. Anyways I loved this lyric/poem it was completely brilliant! ...

Hello FA like I said I was bored so I say this... hmm........ It's not that I don't like it for it's I like this very much but. I want ...

Wow, I don't think we've met but KJ, this is some really good work. It almost made me cry! I loved it, but I do think if you wanted to ...

*awes* It's really good, the title caught my eye right away. Very creative I think. I think you should expand it and make it more love able than it already ...

don't mean to bring you down. But, you should know you shouldn't post more than one lyric, dramtic poetry in a day. Now, if your in a storybook it's okay. ...

huh, how do I put this nicely? Okay first of all, no one in their right mind would read a post this long, but then again I'm not in my ...

I don't think this belongs in "lyric poetry" more of just poetry, I like it, it's down to the point and it did not bore me, whivh is good, you ...

Wow, I love this poem it just hit me with alot of emotion it's perfect and well it's great. I wish you could expand it alot more and if it ...

Way to go dude, I like the idea it's very catchy. It flowed together nicely and the paragraphs look alright. So far I didn't see any misspelled words or gramer ...

Yeah, sorry but Goth Girl is right, the ending didn't fit very well. But if you expanded it a little I think it would be alot better. You didn't force ...

hmm, I'm going to pick apart your work! No, I'm just kidding. Um, this needs to besplit up into different stanza and don't worry since everyone else has stollen all ...

This made me sad.... not in a good way either.... depressed really. The point of this useless crit is that you poured your feelings on paper or in this case.... ...

This is a very good poem but I think you might have some grammer errors. Some of your words are mispelled and honey, that's what spell-check is for. It does ...